HK$20 million (no 's') use a pronoun so that you do not repeat 'profits' - they Tense - is / was not; may have been caused by... ..which are related to... productivity - lower (not slower) only just over a quarter of... The table shows (present tense) ..which shortens...
1. Graph Study
1.1 Profits in Hong Kong According to figure 1, the profits in Hong Kong increased gradually from 1994 and reached a peak in 1997. A possible explanation for this is pre-handover boom which happened in Hong Kong. However, due to the depression after the handover, there was a sudden decline of profits and in 1999 profits fell to their lowest point of just 20 million dollars. Profits then grew steadily towards 2001, attributed to the growth of China market.
1.2 Profits in Singapore The profits in Singapore increased from 1994 and levelled off in 1995. Comparing to Hong Kong, profits of Singapore is not as flourishing as Hong Kong in the early 1990s. This may be caused by the Singaporean taxation policy in that period. The profits dropped steadily from 1996 and levelled off between 1998 and 1999. However, they continued to decrease until 2001. The findings perhaps indicate the vigorous competition from Malaysia in the mid and late 1990s.
2. Table description According to table 4, there are seven aspects of working conditions being examined which related to the degree of satisfaction of senior and junior staff with these aspects. For the majority of the aspects, both senior and junior staff were contented. However, there are three aspects which cannot reach the expectation of the staff. They are office furniture, equipment and pantry.
2.1 Office Furniture As shown in the table, just under half of the junior staff were satisfied with the office furniture. It appears that the uncomfortable chairs would affect the enthusiasm of the junior staff. The implication of this is that the productivity of the junior staff will be relatively slower than the senior staff.
2.2 Equipment With reference to the table, only over a quarter junior staff were pleased with the equipment. The reason for this is the outdated computer system for them. A result of this is that the efficiency of junior staff will be decreased due to frequent shut down and slow operation of the computers.
2.3 Pantry The table showed that just about a half of the senior staff and junior staff were satisfied with the pantry. It is evident that there is only one microwave machine in the pantry. This can lead to long waiting time for using the microwave machine which shorten the lunch hour of the staff.
HK$20 million (no 's')
use a pronoun so that you do not repeat 'profits' - they
Tense - is / was not; may have been caused by...
..which are related to...
productivity - lower (not slower)
only just over a quarter of...
The table shows (present tense)
..which shortens...
1. Graph Study
1.1 Profits in Hong Kong
According to figure 1, the profits in Hong Kong increased gradually from 1994 and reached a peak in 1997. A possible explanation for this is pre-handover boom which happened in Hong Kong. However, due to the depression after the handover, there was a sudden decline of profits and in 1999 profits fell to their lowest point of just 20 million dollars. Profits then grew steadily towards 2001, attributed to the growth of China market.
1.2 Profits in Singapore
The profits in Singapore increased from 1994 and levelled off in 1995. Comparing to Hong Kong, profits of Singapore is not as flourishing as Hong Kong in the early 1990s. This may be caused by the Singaporean taxation policy in that period. The profits dropped steadily from 1996 and levelled off between 1998 and 1999. However, they continued to decrease until 2001. The findings perhaps indicate the vigorous competition from Malaysia in the mid and late 1990s.
2. Table description
According to table 4, there are seven aspects of working conditions being examined which related to the degree of satisfaction of senior and junior staff with these aspects. For the majority of the aspects, both senior and junior staff were contented. However, there are three aspects which cannot reach the expectation of the staff. They are office furniture, equipment and pantry.
2.1 Office Furniture
As shown in the table, just under half of the junior staff were satisfied with the office furniture. It appears that the uncomfortable chairs would affect the enthusiasm of the junior staff. The implication of this is that the productivity of the junior staff will be relatively slower than the senior staff.
2.2 Equipment
With reference to the table, only over a quarter junior staff were pleased with the equipment. The reason for this is the outdated computer system for them. A result of this is that the efficiency of junior staff will be decreased due to frequent shut down and slow operation of the computers.
2.3 Pantry
The table showed that just about a half of the senior staff and junior staff were satisfied with the pantry. It is evident that there is only one microwave machine in the pantry. This can lead to long waiting time for using the microwave machine which shorten the lunch hour of the staff.